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The deeping twilight silence heard
In the whispers of a half dreamed word,
With new moon in a dreamless sleep
And sun, nostalgic vigil keeps.
The black-red light, a pulsing flood.
The ocean sky, from her virgin blood
That drains a living death, is born-
From the edge of time are softly called,
Two women walking, their sacred feet
On either side of the horizon meet.

One stares with eyes of burnished gold
And round her shapely figure holds
A robe of molten, blinding light,
Her face, in which, is hid from sight.
Each footstep burns an eternal road,
A tuneless song around her flows.
The growing things she once did mind
Have quickly withered, slowly died.

The other weeps from cloudy eyes,
A world of pain in each tear she cries.
Buried in a grey-mist gown,
Her face of steel, once more cast down.
Each footstep is a sodden march,
Her moaning wind is drifting past.
She regards her charges with a shifting frown,
All living things, she slowly drowns.

In the world upon the line,
We, between the two, another find.
She walks with sure, unfailing steps,
With serenity, her brow is blessed.
A leafy skirt, her hips embrace -
A sun-kissed field frames her face.

Through her runs the blood of life,
The twilight hour, her midwife.
When each day begins and at its end,
Two separate roads begin to bend,
Two women share a fleeting glance -
A flash that blinds, then breaks the trance.
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The endless balancing act of opposites that keep our world spinning. Without light there would be no dark, without winter there would be no summer, without suffereing there would be no joy. That is the focus of this poem, without suffering, our lives would be meaningless... The merging of these two, these opposites is true joy... When suffering and joy occur together, that is a true epiphany... But thats a whole new can of worms...

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This piece is beautiful, simple as that.
It's well written, and easy to understand, it isn't so caught up in being good poetry that it has lost meaning, yet, it's still deep enough to actually make you feel something and for it to stick with you.
The meaning and message it strong and simple, creating a piece that I'm sure most people would enjoy if they read it. It's written so clearly, and due to a great use of imagery you can pretty much see every line in your mind whilst reading it.
From how it is written to what it's about, it is just a great piece.
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This is written in quite a...old school style (I want a better word or phrase than "old school" but that's all my brain will supply just now). The imagery is ethereal and all the way through stays in keeping with a vibrant yet controlled theme. You provide a though-providing lens for the subject which you say is the focus of this poem :)
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~Musango Jun 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, I really appreciate the feedback :)
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!painter-chan Apr 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how to write down my feelings so I'll only say
:heart:...
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~Musango Apr 13, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!! Im so glad you liked it... :)
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~Musango Apr 12, 2011  Student Writer
thank you :)
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I think your style is reflective of that which you are inspired by - I love it. And this is amazing - keep writing!
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~Musango Apr 12, 2011  Student Writer
Thats my aim, so it makes me happy that you think that... :) Thank you so much!
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:iconzombie-hotel:
どういたしまして :)
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